Optimism101

Ohhhh boy. This is a good intro! It actually sets up a nice haunted-house-ghostbusters-luigi's-mansion-scooby-doo sorta story. Many different paths open, and many different options ahead.
However you say it's gonna have murder and stuff.
So scrap all that and replace it with some deep crap. Maybe some Us, and stuffs.
Otherwise, you got a nice setup!
Keep writing! And we will keep reading!

THat's a sweet story! It looks like it's from the perspective of a sheltered kid. But, if not, then it's still pretty sweet! Setting it up as either a story for a devilish world, or one of sheltered children. Who knows? (Well, of course you do, I mean, you wrote this)
But, I love it! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

And so the romance-in-a-literal-almost-hellscape-world-filled-with-people-that-can-literaly-murder-you-instantly begins.

That... it seems happy, but then I read again, and I get kinda sad :P.
Anyways, I like it! It's simplistic, but not, you know what I mean?
I hope you keep writing! We will keep reading!

This speaks to me more than i want to. And yeah, it's the worst feeling that a person can ever feel. But at least you get to move on. You get to find someone new, someone better. And hopefully they won't tear the heart out again. Things will get better. They have to. Every down has its up. Every trough has its crest. Keep writing, we will keep reading.

Hey, it's nice. I like it. It's a first step towards an army of greatness! You did a good job, I can kinda picture myself there. I get the flashes, ya know? Still, next attempt will be better. Practice practice practice! Keep writing! We will keep reading.

Nice one. I like this story, cus it discusses the basic point of "We're fucked" But also adds a nice alien bit. Helps put everything in perspective, and summarizes our current state pretty nicely. Nice one.

I like another part. meeting the mentor. And kicking him in the nuts. That's cool too.