Optimism101

Hurts. A good definition, but it still hurts. Pain is something we all have to deal with, but acceptance is more important. A well written poem. Describes one's nightmares well.

As one wise person told me once, on my first post, "Sometimes less is more" Something small can still have a big impact. You also define the story as "Terrible" and sure, there are grammar and spelling mistakes, but that's something editing can fix. Otherwise, for the content, it is something we all have to deal with. It's that problem in all of us we can't solve. I try to push it away with "Every down has its up, and every bad day has its good." But it only works now and then. It's a nice story. Could use some polishing, but your content, your work, its nice.

Dang. This one, is amazing. It expresses something that we all have to deal with. That lifelong bond that gets broken. That trust that you have that is so easily removed. It is written with such certainty, such truth, and after reading the Author Notes, it makes sense. It's always hard, and always will be, but we can always move on. We can always grow to be better. With spelling and grammar, it could use some more edits as well, but as a story, and autobiography, it's amazing.

I can relate to this. Maybe not directly, but from a different point of view. It's sad to see what I don't, to know the side I will never see. I can't imagine the pain it would bring. On another note, it expresses the sadness, the hurt, the pain, everything. It shows every second of the event, and it hurts. It really does. I feel so bad for a fictional character. It is well worded, I wasn't able to find mistakes easily, and its amazing. I hope you keep writing And as long as you do, I will keep reading.

Woah. That was brutal. My feelings just kinda crumbled in the corner. The turns, the changes, the effects. I don't know how to feel about this, my emotions have blended together into everything. I find myself feeling overjoyed, depressed, surprised, humored, and everything all at once. Maybe that makes me insane. Otherwise, It was a little tough to get through, so I recommend spreading out your paragraphs, and starting a new line for speech. Some grammer mistakes, but otherwise, the story is amazing. You are so close. "You're ripped at every edge but you're a masterpiece" You are so close.

Wars are never good. I feel it could use some rewording, but otherwise, it's good!

ooooooo, romance! These stories always get to me, and have a special place in my heart. Not only that but it was wonderfully written! The characters are all their own, not different faces to the same person. Well, in some ways. I can't wait for more!

Some more plz! Love your work!