United States • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
I like your descriptions at the beginning. Its common for authors to change their minds while doing first drafts of stories and good that you're self-critical. Perhaps you could've described the boy's escape in more detail, it would've added excitement, but overall its a good story.
i love it
And I wish everyone else could disappear just long enough for me to figure everything out.
so damn truuuuu!!!
awesome!
I think that the wind is God, the dark is sin, the light is salvation and heaven, the fear is satan, and the people are being lead to salvation. I really love the story! I think you did a good job of describing and telling the story of the people.
tHIS DESCRIBES FEELINGS.
omg its good, like deep, and so emotional, keep writing like this, awesome!!
Who is Kent? Some friend of Mark? Or, his own self? Anyway, it's mysterious and thus fun.ðŸ˜ðŸ˜