United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Nice description of the battle of thoughts in mind, very relatable, keep it up
That's a mood.
Good job!
Who is Kent? Some friend of Mark? Or, his own self? Anyway, it's mysterious and thus fun.ðŸ˜ðŸ˜
I like the way you fuse the everyday with the sci-fi. Even in outer space daughters can be irritated by over-protective mothers. Her inner conflict over answering the call is believable and you wrote a good cliffhanger.
Sounds a lot like some intelligent kid who is afraid of the unknown 'things' that dwell in the darkness.
The mattress part is exactly what I used to do when I was young and shared the room with my younger sister.
It inspires me to fight against my fear rather than just hiding under a blanket and pretending to be asleep.
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I like your description of the door, and the idea of currents in a room is interesting. You should've had a capital S at the start of Spanish, but overall this is good.
An interesting concept for a story.
It reminds me of a classic horror film where a haunted castle (in this case, a shack) is high on the rocks in the sea mixed with Coraline vibes.