United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
You caught a plausible situation in a few paragraphs.
As with the first part, you evoke your characters' emotions well.
Well, I think I get what you're saying here, at least in my own way. Good prose, by the way.
I've had this problem before. Honestly I don't have any idea what the best course of action is when wanting to say something but being afraid of what will happen if you do, but this certainly captures the uncertainty of the situation.
I like the metaphorical feel of this story.
Great!
I'm kind of confused about when and who and such, but this is good. I like the dark feeling it has.
You describe Zaire's feelings and the setting very well. This raises a lot of questions about the characters and their culture, but if you're planning on developing it furthet that's good. Keep writing.