United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
I've never been in love either, so I'm probably not the best person to be writing this review. From what I can tell, the main character is suffering from depression, and whoever their crush is is the reason they're still here. I could feel the emotion and I just wanted to say to keep writing, you're really good!
Cheesy? Maybe just a bit, but mostly because that's the way of things, I think. I absolutely love this. You've managed to capture perfectly the way that I've felt many times. This story is beautifully written and conveys so much emotion without being overbearing and wordy. Thanks for sharing it!
I think you did a pretty good job keeping the action going. I liked the urgency the battery percentage gave throughout the story. I, personally, found the setting almost as intriguing as the scenario. It would be interesting to read more.
I'm not really sure what to say about this. Writing-wise, I like how it's all dialogue. I love how the tone of each voice shifts at the end.
It also made me feel sad. I couldn't quite relate to all the details, but I could definitely relate to the overall idea and feel.
It's wonderful writing, and you've given me something to think about.
I enjoyed your poem. Well done.
Nice^^ it feels like i'm the one who said the coward thing HIHI~~