Thomas Ray

Are all your stories this descriptive? I feel like if you wrote a book I'd read it even just because you seem to know how to describe things meticulously and yet make it so engaging. I certainly feel like I've seen this theater before.
These are original stories, right?

Very very cool. I don't mind messy poems, and I feel like this one is perfect this way.

Well. I'm not sure how to say what I'm feeling, so I'll say I love it and hope that says what it should. Seriously, this was so overwhelmingly descriptive! I love the feel of it, it's just so good!

Here's my rating again. Ugh, I can't believe I deleted that.

That hit HARD. I'm almost not okay withthe levels of pure emotion pouring off of this. The only thing I'd change is how fast the death happened. Maybe if he tried to get her to open the door, then shrugged it off, but then later, like at dinner, he breaks the door.
But wow, I physically hurt at that ending, as well as all throughout. Bullying is not okay in any circumstance, not okay for or from any person, and harmful 100% of the time, if only on a subconscious level.
Keep writing! I love this.

WAY better than I expected going into it. This is amazing.

Your writing style is awesome. "And yes, it was very dramatic," gets me every time. The narrator has a voice, and it's a fun one.
Still don't know about the bacon theme, though.