United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Given
This is believable. Keep up your writing, I want more.
This is stunning. Good poetry is any poetry that makes a person feel, and this does exactly that.
True. Tragically true.
Wow. Something about the way you write hits me so hard, and the emotion you've poured onto the page. . . I feel it.
"The irony with life is that those who wear masks often tell more truths that those with open faces."
-The Rose Society, by Marie Lu
This was written so well, I can't even....
Very very cool. I don't mind messy poems, and I feel like this one is perfect this way.
THIS IS MY NEW FAVORITE SUBMISSION FROM YOU
Two tiny things I noticed that can be easily fixed: the part where it says "instead of responding, she drew in a breath" (or something like that) is directly followed by her responding, and it made me confused about who was talking. I would recommend cutting out the "Instead of.. "part and keeping the breath. I liked the breath part.
Second.... Actually that's the only complaint i have.
WHERE IS THE REST OF THE STORY? The dialogue is magical. These characters have character and charm, and I only get to read about them for literally one minute? Your description of the setting is delightful as well! Thoroughly enjoyed it