Thomas Ray

Lemmie just hold my thoughts until I finish the next part.

I refuse. I refuse. No. This is no. I want more Everli.
THIS IS NOT OKAY.
I want Everli back.

This is very good.

Here's my rating again. Ugh, I can't believe I deleted that.

Wow that tone shift halfway through was brutal. This hit me hard.

I'm so impressed. How does one write poetry like this?

I like the idea, and it was super intriguing! Some things could be clearer, but for a first draft, It's pretty amazing. I just have so many questions about the main character that I don't have answers to yet because there isn't more of this story.
So yeah. Keep writing.

I love this.