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Nice. Great smilies. Metaphors? I get the two mixed up....
This is very good.
Well written, my fellow writer. While I don't agree with every point you made, I can accept this for what it is, and that's a wonderfully written story. Musing? Story? I'm still not sure, but yeah. Nice job.
Well. That was interesting.
I don't understand completely, but I really like this.
That hit HARD. I'm almost not okay withthe levels of pure emotion pouring off of this. The only thing I'd change is how fast the death happened. Maybe if he tried to get her to open the door, then shrugged it off, but then later, like at dinner, he breaks the door.
But wow, I physically hurt at that ending, as well as all throughout. Bullying is not okay in any circumstance, not okay for or from any person, and harmful 100% of the time, if only on a subconscious level.
Keep writing! I love this.
This sounds like a toxic telationship. Those are really bad.
Good poem!
There's a power in this poem that many people rarely feel inside themselves. The cages we live inside sometimes turn out to be harder to escape than we thought, and we take it to mean that we ourselves are weak, when in reality, it's admirable that we can even stand under the weight of our personal problems.
I think the mindset presented in this poem could be a good alternative.