Zack

Seems really interesting, can't wait for the next part. However, when a new character talks you should put a new paragraph bc my eyes were going mad trying to figure out who was who and saying what. Otherwise, good job.

It's really hard to feel like you're not seen. I'm sorry you have to experience those deeply painful emotions.

Your worth isn't defined by the opinions of others, and I know how hard that is to grasp when it's your own mother, but try to take heart. There's always light.

Pretty good writing for the topic and audience. I would suggest adding more details and digging deeper into pulling those out of yourself and onto paper, but deeply personal ones like this are always more about what you think of them- just a little suggestion.