Lyn

This is really good! I would love to see what happened that caused her to become this hopeless. Your writing is easy to read and paints the scene quite well, good job!

It’s the truth. Our bodies keep us upright, and yet we look in the mirror and see nothing but mistakes. I’ll tell you what: God doesn’t make mistakes, and he made that body you see in the mirror. You’re absolutely right, perhaps treating it with care will help you see all the good it does for you. Thank you for sharing this!

I couldn’t help but smile at how this student proved that God and man both rely on faith for their principles. And what a twist at the end when you revealed this student was Albert Einstein! You did and excellent job portraying the scene with a simple script. Thank you so much for sharing!

I think it would be a bit more interesting if you held off the reveal of having a finger in the pocket of the main character. Perhaps use the improper noun “it” instead of “a finger”. Just something to think about. Also, good job with the repetition of the winning and losing, that added texture to the story. Well done!

Beautiful. Words can't describe the emotions that washed over me when I read this. Incredible work!

Ooh~ I like the mystery revolved around this! Why did he leave? What does "leave" even mean in this context? Why would Kol give him away? So many questions, I love it! Good job :)

It’s a shame, really. That we lie to ourselves like that. Great storyline though. It made me sad :(

This is beautiful! Good for you for having the courage to walk away like that. Remember, every bad experience teaches us something. Thank you for sharing this.