Lyn

Oh my goodness! A wonderfully written story! You did amazing and I had tears in my eyes when you wrote that Melody was gone. I loved it so so so so so much!!! Keep writing, it’s gorgeous!

A glorious description of God’s love for all of us! Brilliant writing!

I enjoyed the mystery of waking up and not knowing what’s going on. There’s really only one thing that jumped out at me that you can improve on. When writing, try to discribe the world your creating a little bit more. For example, describe what the castle looked like as Elizabeth/Ashley brought Catherine/Madison inside. I think that’s it. All in all, it was really good! You’re off to a great start.

That was amazing! Keep writing, you're incredibly talented!

A nice cliché twist done a little differently, I really enjoyed reading this!

Yes, that is what I would do,
If I were an author.

Beautiful <3

This was incredible! The way you described the train made me believe I could hear it as clear as Beth could. Brilliant job. I can't wait to read more!

Ooh~ I like the mystery revolved around this! Why did he leave? What does "leave" even mean in this context? Why would Kol give him away? So many questions, I love it! Good job :)