Lyn

Please, dont give up! I enjoy reading and watching your progress and I would absolutely hate myself if one day you were just gone. Please, I'm begging you. I know you can get through this. You just have to stay strong. If you wont do it for yourself, do it for me. Please...

You did great! I enjoyed reading it! Just a few grammatical mistakes, but that's alright. As you said, it's your first time. Great job! You abused the caps a little bit, but that's a minor mistake. I loved the positivity! Keep writing, you're going places! <3

Glad I don't have a sister XD
Oh, wait I am the sister-

I enjoyed this. I liked how you said they went for “the ghastly kill.” That topped it off nicely. Thanks for sharing.

Nooo, i dont want my imaginary friends to fade. Writing about them shall keep them alive >:3
A lovely story, though. I think it might sound better if the imaginary friend acted as a child might, though. Instead of calling Timothy "dear," try calling him "buddy" or something. there were a few grammatical mistakes, but those are easily overlooked. Over all, it was pretty good! I enjoyed reading it :)

The tragedy of losing someone dear to you. You tied this to a close very well, good job! It's like a half-story-half-poem and I like that. I do have to say that it's kind of hard to keep up with, though. The repetition of "who are you?" made me want to skip every other line. Maybe consider making the other lines a bit longer or taking out some of those "who are you" 's. Or maybe I'm just really lazy, who's to say? Other than that, it was really good!

Very intriguing! A few grammatical errors, but those are easy to fix. Keep going, you're very talented!

Very entertaining! You have a few grammatical errors, such as using commas when necessary. If you used the names of the characters a bit more when they talked, it would make it more clear as to who is speaking. I think that's about it. You're really talented!