AaronTheRocker

The comparisons of the abstract idea is amazing.
'Sharp tines scratching the black board', 'bug in a spider's web'- those are great connections .
You had me making all these connections and seeing what is happening, but then the ending came and it sort of threw me off the rails.
I believe if you took out, "She was gone" and then had "Never to return again" be the last phrase by itself for the ending, it would spark that emotion of one unique kind of love has vanished.
Overall, it was great.

This is an interesting concept to a story. It gives me some strange Harry Potter vibes for some reason (maybe because of the my thought-relation with this and the mermaids). This also taps into my fear of deep dark water so...yeah, spooky.

There were some parts to this story where the grammar got to me so I had to re-read a few parts (that may just be me though) and I need more info on these characters and the backstory on this.

Hope you write more for this story because if this is it, I may just cry because this is something vastly different not just the plot, but structure wise also with the intro and the sizes of paragraphs being consistent with phenomenal breaks.

Nice!

This is pretty gnarly.
I noticed that it's only two sentences, but that's what made it perfect because I thought of it as a narration that someone is saying so you don't listen for breaks in a sentence, but the overall idea of how it flows together.

Respect.

It worked well. It worked so well that I could only help to think that for the last sentence, I wish it was broken up. Thinking that to make it stand out stronger the last sentence would be,
"So she sits in silence, in tears.
Silently screams."

I believe having that action be by itself would enunciate the message from being heard and recognized to being just something that only one's self knows.

Appreciate the overall awareness put forth of seeing both sides of the good and bad.

This is a reality people live with and I and others wish no one had to deal with this sort of situation let alone harm in general, but when it comes to these situations I wish and hope that victims of this put there foot down before it happens by being straight forward and become lions at the moment of saying "no" and fighting back.

Somewhat in relation, this is another reason why I advocate for concealed carry. So situations like this can be deterred before it happens. If truth can't make someone stop, I'm sure branding a weapon, like a gun, would quickly resolve the problem so it doesn't become worse. And if that doesn't work, well looks like the trigger has to be pulled then. Sounds harsh and haste, but if it's gotta be stopped, it's gotta be stopped and put to an end.

Also, the after events of a serious topic like this has damaging results. I never have been physically assaulted or sexually assaulted, but I don't like hugs, holding hands or even a pat on the back. My body and mind just can't handle that especially if it's someone new to me. I make it clear to them, not in a mean way, but obvious, that if they touch me or "trap" me (like a corner of a room), if you will, whether in good intentions or not I will push and fight back. I don't mess with that shit. Do that to other people who can tolerate it or understand your purpose, just don't do it to me.

Sorry if this got deep and personal, but these situations just eats at me and I get easily irritated and frustrated by it, but most of all, sorry that this has happened to you and I hope life is still and turns in a good direction for you.

Like the concept. Old-time feel of a good cliche. It's like Little House on The Prairie style.
Overall, great. With the sequencing of events and how you described them, they seem cut-off. Instead of a steady consistent flow, it is stop-and-go in some areas. Not to much, but recognizable, at least in my opinion.

Yo, I love the movie Ghost. Finely written.

Ah, the ocean.
For someone who has thalassophobia, such as myself, this would be a nightmare situation. And this correlates well with someone who may fall off the beaten trail mentally. Get a little too curious, anxious or overwhelmed, then all of a sudden it goes down hill.