United States • 25 y/oReviews Received
Dang.
I like the concept of the story and I like how it moves fast as it pertains to the idea of the title being a "chase", but I feel it went too fast.
There is a beginning, middle and end, of course, yet I believe there is some missing material that would enhance the story such as a strong build-up describing actions that take place in the middle and further questioning/back-of-the-mind fear for the character that can settle at the end. The beginning was pretty darn neat and I like that it was straight to the point/action.
Alright.
This is totally classic horror right here. Reminds me of something that would be an episode of Night Gallery and Twilight Zone.
To have a dream and process through it as if it were real to then come to the conclusion that it may have actually happened.
You strike a good balance between crisp, realistic descriptions and a touch of mystery.
I really enjoyed this story. It brought to mind the Hound of the Baskervilles. Well done.
A swell story. The way the prisoner moves things about with his power brings to mind the Force in Star Wars. Well done.