Andy (Formerly Apemann)

Your last confusing, incoherent paragraph completely undermines everything you had written before it! Up to that point it was an interesting and engaging story. Perhaps an edit would be a good idea? If you do, please take care with your spelling and punctuation as there are several errors.

Your lack of spell-checking spoils this interesting and creative piece of work. Remember: if YOU don't respect your own work how can you expect other's to? Overall a good piece but please take more care with future submissions...

The clear problem with your story is the solid block of text. It would have been helpful if you'd broken it into smaller, more 'manageable' paragraphs. Also, take the time to use your computer's spell-check facility as it will pick up mistakes before you submit your work.

Overall, not a bad piece of work. :-)

Some large philosophical questions :-) Nicely written and presented.

A very thoughtful few lines. Well done :-)