Andy (Formerly Apemann)

Some large philosophical questions :-) Nicely written and presented.

I like the upbeat and positive message your short poem offers. Nice work :-)

Interesting poem. Your credits in the 'author's notes' box are unnecessary...

Regrettably not all of your poems follow the true haiku 5-7-5 syllables rule. However, an interesting - if somewhat macabre - collection.

This piece is good, but slightly spoiled by its 'wordiness'. Some of your sentences are unnecessarily wordy and over-descriptive:

"We stay up late into the night talking, confiding our secrets in each other, showing our burning desires without flinching while looking into the faces of each other's truths and faults"

This feels as though your are trying to impress readers with your vocabulary, but you don't need to. You are good enough story-teller without having to load every sentence with as many words as you can think of. Sometimes the less you write the better it reads...

There are some punctuation errors in this piece but it is generally okay. Please take time to check your work thoroughly before submitting.

Take a little more care with your punctuation. A nice poem.

Another interesting story. It has it's faults, but on the whole a good effort.