United Kingdom • 63 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Your stories are good - but take care with your spelling and punctuation.
Whilst this is an interesting story, there are faults with it. had you used your computer's spell-check and thesaurus facility many of the small errors would have been highlighted for you to correct.
This was surprisingly dark and deep. An excellent effort from a very active imagination. I look forward to reading more of your work :-)
Another interesting submission - but take care. It is not good practice to use numerals in prose: numbers should be written in full. Similarly, abbreviations are also not acceptable. Thus, '75 mph' should be written 'seventy-five miles per hour'. Your computer's spell-check and thesaurus facility will help you to avoid these minor issues in future works.
Another interesting submission - but take care. It is not good practice to use numerals in prose: numbers should be written in full. Similarly, abbreviations are also not acceptable. Thus, '32' should be written 'thirty-two'. Your computer's spell-check and thesaurus facility will help you to avoid these minor issues in future works.
An interesting submission - but take care with your work. It is spoiled a little by your lack of attention to detail. Use your computer's spell-check and thesaurus to avoid unnecessary grammar, spelling and punctuation errors. DO keep writing, though!
A wonderfully mature and perceptive poem from one so young. Fabulous!
This story is not without faults, but overall it works well.