I enjoy this story because of how smooth the words flow together. Great job!
Nice! Reminds me of an X Files episode, but different, nonetheless. I was worried it would be the same, but it wasn't, so I like your originality.
I love this, gives off a nostalgic feel!
I for one enjoy this story greatly! It is heartwarming, yet sad. Great job!
This is very touching as Christian myself, good job!
What a beautiful poem! I enjoyed the use of the capitalized 'She' as kiraafinifrock had stated. It makes it seem like the person you are speaking of is very important in your life. It makes the poem more touching and sincere. Great job!
I agree with lemonslice. You shouldn't start a story without knowing who is speaking.
Beyond that, I enjoyed the story, keep up the good work!
I love this beautiful short story because there's not many like it. Overall, good job, but it had a few mistakes such as:
'Just than, I woke up.'
Instead it should've been;
"Just then, I woke up."
Just be sure to check it through before submitting, but nice job!