United States • 56 y/oReviews Received
i don't really think that i liked this one i mean i thought it would because it mention love but then when i acaully started reading it that was not what i was expecting on that
Children will probably like how the parrot goes from zero to hero. It would take more than 20 parrots to right the ship but you're using a surreal premise all along so you might get away with it. Its a nice twist at the end.
The pigeon and what it left is a witty touch. I've heard before that people in dry climates welcome rain so that rings true. In my native Britain rain means gloom, but I can see why things would be different in a desert.
Overall your descriptions are good. Just one thing, 'clutched' the guitar would be better than 'engulfed.' If you engulf something you cover it completely. One hand would'nt cover the whole guitar. Otherwise well done.
Yo, I love the movie Ghost. Finely written.