United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Spice up your way of story telling, while I'm into these kinds of stories, I can't lie when I say I see potential. Just make the story more interesting, describe the atmosphere and setting a little more, set the scene and play the events out.
I'd say to continue, for some reason it's catching my attention. The grammar usage was off at times and the techniques can be dull but it's an intriguing story for me, I'd want to know what happens.
sad but I love it
This is the funnest story I have ever read! Make more please!
love everything!!!!! great job
Sounds pretty good! Kind of wish they rhymed a little more, but it sounded very nice.
Nice! There's one thing - your lines don't have the same rhythm all the way through. What I mean by that is at on part the first line rhymed with the second, at at the end it was the first and third.
I love the meaning of this poem and can't wait to hear more from you!
Oh my gosh that was frickin hallarious!! I loved it! I feel like I'm needing out. I do that a lot. The fact that I knew what most of those browsers and apps are is very embarrassing.
Great wording and use of irony