Phoenix

I had to read this several times throughout the day cuz I love it soooo much. Idk if other people see it this way, but to me it felt deep, but not unbearably so. Like, it's not overthought, it just is. I really have no other way to explain that. I also really like the rhyming. The scheme wasn't the same exactly, but I feel like where the rhyming words were just made each section really click. Once again, I loveee it! And I can't wait to read more from you!!! :D

Beautiful! <3
That hook is amazing; right from the first line I felt that I was really drawn into what would be said next. Hooks are something I really struggle with, so I can recognize a really well written one when I see it.
I also just really love it in general. When I read this, it was a little crazy because I was imagining like inspirational music in the background and the ending really showed how the speaker's views had changed. Spectacular!!! <3

omg creepyyyy. Is there gonna be another part???

omgggg! That ending really got to me... Amazing work!

aaah I love the ending that was great. Really nice story, I liked how it ended :) Keep writing!

Tip: please separate your paragraphs when a new idea comes up or someone is speaking. Otherwise, that was pretty good.

oh my god, this is so eerie!

omg I love the plot and I love everything about this but if you don't mind could you write a nonbinary love story <3

aaaaaaahhhhhh this is so saaaaaaaaaad
Great job tho this is wonderfully written