Reviews Given
I really liked it, I can't wait for more(though you already told me about a lot of it)
I liked that, it definitely shows what it was like.
This is a good story, it says a lot about life.
Your scaring me man!
That's dark, but it's a true representation of some people's lives. Good job!
That was intense.
Legolas will always be the best.
My only advice for you is to make a new paragraph when someone is speaking. it makes it clearer and easier to read. For example: "Hi," said bob. "Hello, bob," Joe said.
Instead, it would be:
"Hi," said bob.
"Hello, bob," Joe said.
I hope this is useful, it's always easier for me to read a story when someone does this.