United States • 30 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
I feel like this every time I get committed to a story (at least twice a day 😜). Sometimes it get so frustrating you want to scream (and sometimes you do). Very well written. I love it!
Excellent! I want MORE!!!
Hi Fate,
I appreciate the honest emotions you've put into the story so far.
However, it's considered cliché (and it's just bad writing) to include a character waking up and go through the morning chores i.e showering. Try and go into the actual story as quickly as you can and let those boring parts be left out. You've got a good feeling for writing. Keep it up!
Holy crud. I love it!
That . . .was amazing! I loved it .
Very real. As someone whose familiar with this, I appreciate how you expressed that the person was tricked rather than too caught up in something else, as many stories on this topic often do. Your structure, elongated with the sweet parts and short with the dark parts, expresses many different things in itself. Nice job