Soul

Nice writing. The story has a good flow to it after a slightly unsteady start. Hopefully we'll get to read more about these young characters :-)

Simple, heartfelt and so typically you!

Nice one, hon...

I never expected that was the ending .

This poem is thought-provoking and fluid, yet sharp and full of emotion. I really liked it. However, there are many grammatical errors that stopped me from giving it a 5/5. If those were to be corrected, I would change my rating.

Nice little poem. There is one line that reads a little awkward, because its so long. It seems like it interrups the flow and should be two different lines. I could see this poem being turned into an interesting short story. I want to know more about the woman with the poison lips.

I don't know why but I really find this story attracting and interesting; it's actually the first story I read here.

At first I thought this one in going to be a heartbreaking story, but it turns out to be 'I-can-relate' story--those occurrences which happen all the time when writing something, ugh, those are just... fantastically true. This is a nice piece of work!