United States • 29 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
I don't know why but I really find this story attracting and interesting; it's actually the first story I read here.
At first I thought this one in going to be a heartbreaking story, but it turns out to be 'I-can-relate' story--those occurrences which happen all the time when writing something, ugh, those are just... fantastically true. This is a nice piece of work!
This poem is thought-provoking and fluid, yet sharp and full of emotion. I really liked it. However, there are many grammatical errors that stopped me from giving it a 5/5. If those were to be corrected, I would change my rating.
Loved it !
Very real. As someone whose familiar with this, I appreciate how you expressed that the person was tricked rather than too caught up in something else, as many stories on this topic often do. Your structure, elongated with the sweet parts and short with the dark parts, expresses many different things in itself. Nice job
That . . .was amazing! I loved it .
Holy crud. I love it!
Hi Fate,
I appreciate the honest emotions you've put into the story so far.
However, it's considered cliché (and it's just bad writing) to include a character waking up and go through the morning chores i.e showering. Try and go into the actual story as quickly as you can and let those boring parts be left out. You've got a good feeling for writing. Keep it up!
Excellent! I want MORE!!!