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I agree with what you say, but for how you connect the idea of a happy life and the idea of 'gender and sex' doesn't really fit together.
Glad you brought up the topic though :)
I'd say this is pretty good. Also amazed by how many areas of writing you delved into.
This is pretty good. Horror aspect was okay, but the story in all is pretty darn good. Little different from all the cheesy horrors. You may have brought folk lore horror into a new light.
Life can be just a...pain sometimes (had some colorful language to put in, but I'll refrain).
This is neat.
You created the characters and their relationships right away giving a detailed description of how they are and act leaving little to no blank space.
For your comment at the end, pessimism shouldn't have to be 'forgiven' like it's a sin because it tells a truth of reality.
This is Ivan Drago hard hitting (sorry for the Rocky reference lol).
Dude. Aaron. Hermano.
You got me with this one.
The words and how it flows, the structure of the sentences, like dang son. You got words, style and rhythm that can grab anyone's attention.
I also like the whole idea of how you made a piece of string more than a piece of string as it can be transformed into something beautiful.
P.S: You could totally rap this poem.
Caught red handed. Like it.