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At first it seems like things will never be all right again. Then there's a period when some days are not bad and others are horrible again. Don't be afraid to ask for support.

My mother died four years ago. She didn't take her own life but I know it takes time to get back on an even keel. Things are never the same again, but that first surge of grief and bewilderment won't last. You can't put a timetable on recovery, it takes different people in different ways.

Our time isn't the first when people have questioned traditional gender roles. It happened when men went off to fight in both world wars and women took over jobs that had once been theirs. They didn't do it to prove a point but to keep the economy going until peace returned. It happened when women first got the vote. That said, some people were nostalgic for a happy time years before and so tried to resist or slow the process of change.

I agree that change must come from within rather than by changing appearances.

A convincing account of how a teenager would feel towards an absent parent. Love can exist outside of a biological family, people have found it when factors beyond their parents control, like war or natural disasters, have parted them.

When it comes to other families, people can have problems they don't share whether face to face or on social media.

This is a plausible, relevant story. Well done.

I found this piece very moving, well done.

No shame in being a mix of strength and weakness, that's true for me and everyone I know.

In paragraph seven, would it be better if the girl was hugging her doll for comfort rather than playing with it? That seems more plausible given that she's just suffered a terrible loss. A poor family might well have to keep working through the shock but they'd be feeling upset, just having to carry on in spite of that. Keep practising and you'll master that.