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I like your description of the door, and the idea of currents in a room is interesting. You should've had a capital S at the start of Spanish, but overall this is good.

I see what yoi're saying and a lot of people will relate to it. A lot of us have had to give up on a dream for one reason or another. Some of us fail using one way, then find another that works. Some people loose one dream but find another that fills the gap. Others are not so lucky.

Perhaps the important thing is to have a plan b. Contrary to what some politicians seem to think there's no shame im having one of those. We can never be sure things will always go our way.

You evoke a sense of place very well. Your protagonist's self-criticism is plausible, as are her hopes for her daughter.

This is a concise and thoughtful piece. Its a good start for a very young author.

I'm glad Wolf made it in the end.
I'd have put a little more suspense in the opening blurb. I'd have put 'will he turn his life around?' instead of saying he does. The actual story is good.

The technical aspects of poetry are not my strong point, but the sentiments are appropriate for our times.

You convey well how, as she grows up a bit, she becomes more aware of a wider world beyond her own home.
With the mushrooms, are you trying to show that she's a nature lover with a deep knowledge of her environment? As to how necessary it is, that depends on whether a deep knowledge of nature is important in a later episode. It also depends on what you and your readers are interested it. We don't all like the same things.

I like the quips and the descriptions of snow and festivities. I wouldn't comment on their talking a man out of suicide as, thankfully, I've no experience of that. I suspect that what works in one case might not in another. Overall its a good story.