Trinidad and Tobago • 18 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
this was so beautiful, i love it
Nooo, i dont want my imaginary friends to fade. Writing about them shall keep them alive >:3
A lovely story, though. I think it might sound better if the imaginary friend acted as a child might, though. Instead of calling Timothy "dear," try calling him "buddy" or something. there were a few grammatical mistakes, but those are easily overlooked. Over all, it was pretty good! I enjoyed reading it :)
I really enjoyed this story! I love how you said the world of snow outside was her friend, that made me smile. I also liked how the cat's name was Leo. It's a name I have a guilty pleasure of seeing. Thanks for posting this!
Beautiful. Words can't describe the emotions that washed over me when I read this. Incredible work!
This was awesome! I love the mystery around the old man. A couple mistakes, but those can easily be overlooked so no biggy.
This is really good! I would love to see what happened that caused her to become this hopeless. Your writing is easy to read and paints the scene quite well, good job!
It’s the truth. Our bodies keep us upright, and yet we look in the mirror and see nothing but mistakes. I’ll tell you what: God doesn’t make mistakes, and he made that body you see in the mirror. You’re absolutely right, perhaps treating it with care will help you see all the good it does for you. Thank you for sharing this!
Your descriptions are good but you could add a little more tension. If the kitten tries to run and Amy looses sight of it she could go home, get a piece of fish or chicken and lay it down where the animal was. Then after an anxious wait it could return, drawn by the scent of food and this time let Amy take it. A little more difficulty would make a more interesting story.
Its a good choice of subject.
I've got a cat story on page 11 of this site, 'Misty's Cry,' and there are more besides.