United Kingdom • 26 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
I think that though you do need to work on the grammar and punctuation and sentencing, there is a great idea implanted in your writing. I suggest making this the prompt for a new story.
You could start out with the boy not thinking that the story was true, and entering the abandoned bathroom. This way the reader is still creeped out and worried for the main character.
You could also use an age for the boy (both of them), and tell why the boy in the mirror is first off in the mirror and second whh he skipped his classes.
Great work, can't wait to hear more!
A little weird.... um.... 🤐
There were a few grammar mistakes, like "seen" instead of "see," and you forgot to end the part where the narrator speaks with the ", but besides that is was beautiful and amazing. I hope you write more
Wow that's embarrassing! I've forgotten to wear Underwear once but that's horrible. New source of nightmares XD!
There were a few grammar errors but the way you wrote the piece of text made it emotional and created connections for the reader. Be strong!
Wow!! It sounds great! I knew it was a father or stepfather at about the third paragraph, but that's just because I have read things like this. There are a few grammar errors, but besides that it's great!
I suffer greatly from anxiety, and hearing it explained in words got me thinking. I did feel anxiety while reading this, and it also comforted me that other people can have the same symptoms. I believe that this is a story, wether people are relating to genres when they are saying it's not or whatever.
Any who, I think it was great.
I think this symbolizes life and love perfectly. I admire the symbolism you used with the forest - very great job.