Kat

The story is GREAT and the formatting is just fine, I'm on an iPhone, too. I think that the detail is amazing and I couldn't find any errors! Best story read this morning so far!

I have officially read everything you have put on your profile so far (because if I read one story from someone and get hooked I can't stop) and right now I think you write a lot of really sad stories. Can I dare you to write a happy one? Just a dare.
Anyway, I love the use of words and the way you describe his backstory and desicion. Gosh that's a sad ending.
-KP

Write more oh my gosh holy cow m. I've heard something like it but oh my gosh

That was awesome! I love the way that you described everything and know that you are undoubtedly an even more creative writer now that you have the experience and stuff. Wow, that sounded cheap. Anyway, I'm a part of a big (extended) family, with around 40 relatives. I love life sometimes, especially when life involves being awoken by a butt in your face and a sibling telling you they lost the remote. XD sarcasm, life's relief.

Holy crud. I love it!

Wow. Jaw-dropping and convincing story that will definitly keep you up all night.

Wow, that was awesome! I just can't. That was good. Wow. This is one of the only times I've been rendered speechless.
-KP

It is looking great but you need to finish the chapter!! I'm going NUTS!!