Khaled Saeed

The beauty about your writing style is that you don't hesitate to put your thoughts across.
Your choice of words is remarkably mature, yet somehow compliments the youthful, but agonising, emotions so effortlessly.

For a very well written story, I wonder why the 'I' is repeatedly 'i'..
As a reader, my first reaction was that the spell check is missing and was distracted. But then, does the author use the 'i' instead of 'I' to make some point? I couldn't tell, but would suggest the 'I' in capital letter be used.
Sometimes the finer points can be missed.

Very interesting and certainly offbeat. Please do continue writing.

It's not easy to blend practical realities with emotional turmoil. As a reader one can differ with the mindset but there is no escaping the powerful and personalised narrative.

What a wonderful way to capture the emotions and uncertainties of adolescence!
Please keep on writing, as you not only have the ability but also a unique way of expressing your thought.

For more mature readers and writers, this may have been an obvious conclusion but coming from a 15 year old writer, I must say this reflects a thinking mind and a feeling heart; quite a comforting and pleasant realisation. The setting of a 'memory chest' is such a wonderful idea that any writer would have loved to base the story on.
Please keep on writing as you have what it takes.
Stay blessed.

Hmm, this gets interesting as it goes.
For a twelve-year old writer, this is quite a mature storytelling.
Keep it up, Auron

Very powerful. Great insightful writing.
The writing style looks quite familiar too.

The spoiler for me was the lack of formatting. With proper line-breaks and logical flow through individual paragraphs, this story could be far more appealing.