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I enjoy this style and the emotion lingering behind it all. long sentences with blunt cut offs in between reveal the situation is unresolved and the anger is heavy.
you are not confined to the family earth gave you.
thanks for sharing this.
This is very creative and colorful with mega undertones. The strangeness of the details is beautiful. The story telling and progression was good, too. It felt short and choppy but also flowing through. Like a wave, but a lot of them. Nice work.
This is a really brave piece. A lot of people will argue so much about this and go against what you're saying (likely to suppress their own guilt), but it's so true and so important to talk about it. Porn is a quiet disease that needs to be addressed more. The depths of its darkness feeds and is really toxic. Thanks for sharing this part of your story.
beautiful concept, simple and crisp and I love the play of give and take with us and nature. This is really good.
I love this idea of nature being dead and resurrected through Spring- it truly is the cycle of growth in us as well and the way you portrayed it was vivid. I do believe nature knows truths about life that we simply don't. Thanks for sharing my appreciation with nature in this piece.
I especially like the third stanza. Growth is so painful yet so important. What we do matters and our suffering is not in vain. Again, all of this is literally the story of the Gospel so that what it reminds me of- we were dead in our sins until Jesus allowed for us to be born again through His spirit. Ephesians 2:1-10 is all about this concept. Rebirth is painful and the fruits of it are love. I also appreciate the title and repetition of Blossom and Bloom. I didn't know the difference of these two concepts until I looked them up, and it's very fitting for the purpose of this piece, so I like that detail too.
This reminds me of the book Ecclesiastes. Everything we see will perish and is essentially meaningless; it's what we do with what we see that channels meaning. The idea of anchoring all these aspects with the same phrase "like everything under the sun" reminds us of how we're all connected in this way. It's an interesting style because there's a hint of dread and hope at the same time. Cool concept.
The point of art is to cause controversy by bringing an issue to light- whether it be an internal conflict, a political issue, a human rights issue or anything else. Thank you for utilizing art in its purposed form.
You often incorporate a sort of song style with background singers through parenthesis, it's almost a traditional trait of yours so I appreciate that was put in here again. I like how you personified Time and Nature as well as the lines "fragile life turned broken glass." This poem is a story with beautiful structure and perspective that catches your gut and makes you think. Thanks, again, for sharing a piece of your mind with us.
I didn't find this cringey or cheesy at all- this is actually well done, especially for your age. I enjoy how you separated the sections, steered away from just repeating the title too many times, but I especially enjoy the first two lines. Very captivating intro and heartfelt without exposing a vein. Distant but still genuine. Thanks for sharing this!