Kiraa

This sounds a lot like the terrifying book Revelation. I like how you started the poem how you did, with sin breeding in the mind and taking over all. So true. The whole word play on reign and rain is cool here too. Definitely will be a scary time. But hey, we know the ending that Jesus wins. I also like these lines: "Danger it lives, freedom it dies/ rewriting rules of humanity." The entire push-and-pull of evil and good here is a cool topic. Our world is such a wild place.

I really appreciate your use of words and the way you draw comparisons. This story is strong and elaborate in such a short amount of words, it really drew my attention to it. I can tell you have a great imagination as it comes out in your writing. I found this story to be jagged and demanding and colorful. Thanks for sharing

Smoothly bliss and heatbreaking.

Your words seemed to dance off the page, which went perfectly well with the concept of harmony that you presented in this piece. The line "we co-exist with honesty and integrity" impacted me heavily while reading this. This harmonious song would be perfect, if only presented in a world where the majority of people are God willing. Thanks for sharing your dreams.

This is one of the most honest stories I've seen in a while.
The line "I felt nothing sometimes and everything all at once other times" hit me very deeply. That overwhelming sensation of desperation and emptiness, yet swollen with so much despair, is a feeling I wouldn't wish on my worst enemy. You can dm me ANYTIME you need to talk about ANYTHING. I promise you, feelings are temporary. Just as happiness won't last forever, neither will sadness. Keep your head up.

This is so good. So real. Beautiful representation and metaphor for nature and the desire to feel through ironically actions that prohibit feeling. Beautifully tragic. Do you think snowflakes are given a specific place to land, or are they just victims of the wind? Your mind interests me

I gave it 5 stars for your courage to write this. I think many people go through this, but often times struggle to reach the happy phase again, and struggle even more to admit to their emotions. Remember: It's okay when you don't feel okay, too. Good for you for finding happiness again though :)

I really liked this story. Your symbolism in this is absolutely beautiful and I'd love to take the time to explore it. Something about when you said "A floor lamp stood behind us like a sentry on guard" really caught my attention, as well as the pigeon description at the end and how Griffin was against a lamp post when the main character saw him. The intriguing beginnings of a tale of forgiveness- or, not to forgive. You're a great writer. Loved how it hints to the morality of war and how it affects the people involved, too. Good stuff.