Kiraa

A great and inspiring story, only some grammatical errors.

I would suggest using stronger word choice, but since the people you're writing about are shallow, it makes a good parallel to keep it more simple. Good story about a common issue that isn't spoken of enough.

This is really good and really powerful. The ability to reflect on yourself and your past is actually really hard to do. I especially like this sentence: "I saw you, bit by bit, the defeat slumping your shoulders, tainting your soul." The distance you've identified between you and your experiences and the old you all in one swirl mixed with your self-awareness is incredible. Super interesting stuff and written in an impactful way.

I like how you showed how the rose develops overtime and recovers and blooms again, as does love. I also enjoyed your use of the word "momentary" when you say "It brings momentary beauty with its blossom".

I really enjoyed the beginning where you describe this world, it's creative and intriguing. I also liked how you described the wonderful sides of these humans- their amazing power and harmonious peace- as well as the dark sides- them wanting to take over. It kind of shows the light and dark that's in everyone, and I enjoyed it.

I liked the last two lines as well as "It's something of a rush knowing her soul has been bared". I like how it's a story about writing stories, and overall, it was a well use of rhymes. Some advice would be to focus on one aspect toward the middle and really dig deep to find out why it's like that- like, for example, really digging deep into why you enjoy writing and why it brings you such relief.

I liked the message, and the fact that it is a true story makes it both better and worse- better because of how real it is, and worse because of how real it is.

I liked how a lot of your lines held meaning, good use of diction. Decent poem