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kiraafinifrock is from US United States • 22 y/o • Female

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The End of the Road by billyyoutwo1

Was quite intriguing... your use of diction to express the confinement of the place was effective. I felt like I had a quick history lesson there. The subtle darkness that lingered behind the words in this story showed though well.

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Let Me Go by TheForgotten

A good job at expressing hopelessness

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Pretend You Don't See Her by Andy (Formerly Apemann)

I would suggest using stronger word choice, but since the people you're writing about are shallow, it makes a good parallel to keep it more simple. Good story about a common issue that isn't spoken of enough.

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Closets by Madison_Writes

I like it a lot. Great metaphor and great ending. Use of structure was great- short when it needed to be and added to the tone. Good job

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My End by 🌸Fate

Very real. As someone whose familiar with this, I appreciate how you expressed that the person was tricked rather than too caught up in something else, as many stories on this topic often do. Your structure, elongated with the sweet parts and short with the dark parts, expresses many different things in itself. Nice job

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Wings by kkhause

This is a good story. Your structure was intriguing and I really appreciated your longing for the stars, as I have a similar one for nature. Has a haunting tone that I also liked. Good job

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This Is Me by HazbinAllover

Simple and raw. Very honest and pure with some kind of lingering fire. I, too, am familiar with these family dynamics- just know you're never alone, someone out there is rooting for you and you wouldn't even know.

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I I I I by A Person

Everything about this intrigues me. Every single paragraph. On the edge of my seat yet desperately confused. One things for sure: whether this is a true story of you, or a made up story with a main character, the person telling the story has developed a selfless empathy. Wanting to take the hate out of someone else's heart for their own sake is a painful yet beautiful gift. Please write more.

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