United Kingdom • 46 y/o • MaleReviews Given
I love micro fiction because of stories like this one. The first line sounds very differently when read a second time. :)
Keep up the writing!
I'm always amazed when a full story can be told within 1000 words. This is a real nugget of a story. Well done!
Not friends with Robert Rankin, are you? :)
I really enjoyed this poem and I'm usually not a poetry person.
This is an awesome little vignette. What I liked about it was the level of emotions you managed to pack into short space.
Think about two things when you write short fiction like this:
* Dialogue punctuation.
* What POV are you writing from?
I'm really impressed by the story. Well done!
A couple of dialogue punctuation errors, but otherwise a pretty funny tale. Reminiscent of Monty Python delight.
You've got a decent structure and an interesting subject matter here. What lets you down are unnecessary typos and grammar mistakes.
This is more of a vignette than story, however. I do suggest you read up on the difference, because a lot of writers receive rejection letters because they don't understand this.