United States • 19 y/oReviews Given
pretty short, but hits the same.
hey! i loved this little poem!
if you would like some constructive criticism i've got some:
it seems like you're trying a bit too hard to make things rhyme. not that there's anything wrong with that, but it seems a little awkward. not all poems need to rhyme at the end.
besides that, i think its amazing! great job!
Very good!! But I think if you add a bit more detail, it would be better...