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When I read the title, I was like "Uh oh..." When I finished reading, my brother thinks I have issues 'cause I just bursted out in laughter while staring at my computer screen. Oh, well.
Keep up the great work! Make more funny ones like these.

:) So sweet. Keep up the great work.
As for your mysterious boy here, I think maybe that you should make a move. Who knows? ;D

Wow.
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I have no other words. XD

Holy. Crap.

I have nothing to say besides: So good.

Nothing to say besides: MORE PLEASE.

awww. So sweet.

As for improvement, I don't think there's anything to address. Good flow of words, details, emotion, etc...

Keep up the great work!

Intriguing. A sequel would be real cool.