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Not normally a great lover of poetry, but I thought this was great. Well done!

I enjoyed it.
One thing I noticed though was maybe a little too much description at the intense moments e.g. "...entering the water, if only up to the laces of her hazel brown walking boots". In my opinion, it detracted from the tension. In other parts though your descriptions worked well.

Loved this story.

Nice twist at the end

I don't usually appreciate poetical prose, but I do really like this. I think you have talent, continue writing.....

This is so sad, so heart-felt.....
Well done!

Well done Paul, I like the way you built up your characters

Great story. I especially liked the last line.