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This brought tears to my eyes. Some might look upon this as creepy, others as confusing. I, on the other hand find this pure beauty and sorrow. A beautiful black rose with beads of frozen water on its petals and frozen water climbing up its velvety black stem in a room of black marble walls and floor also represents sorrow and beauty. This is more beautiful because it has one very important quality in it, remorse. We didn't need to know ow she died, those were details that you decided not to add and you pulled it off perfectly. In the end, she cut because she felt as if she shouldn't have done what she did. She realized that her daughter is the only one she has now. She loved her before she died, because she killed herself to be with her. Now, they can be together.

not bad wish it was longer

I was crying. At first I was a bit confused, but when I reread it I Understood. Good job.

Well...... That was kinda creepy and sad

A part from the grammar mistakes and so on. Well written! It's not because there are mistakes, that the story is bad. Writing is about sharing a story, not about telling everyone how good your grammar is. That is for language. Don't pay too much attention to this person. Keep it up! :) ps: Mrald wrote: "with all the grammatical all" that sentence is not really correct either xD and infront of a "but" should be a comma :P