United States • 19 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
you lost me a little and the story was a little tense, try to be more unique, still, it was cool.
i like that you shared what is going on in your life and i guess it think that it is one of those situations that you have to be really patient and just be there for her as much as you can to prove that you aren't going anywhere and that she can trust you. as far as text, you have a lot of grammatical errors and it was kind of hard to understand but i hope everything turns out fine for you
oh i was waiting for it to continue! don't stop in the middle!
it was good but (this is going to sound weird but) with future works, maybe try to make the rhyming lines go ABABCDCD... or something like that instead of AABBCCDD because it does give a different feel so idk just try it out, otherwise, l like the words
love this, it made me think and it wasn't to obvious. i definitely recommended it.
i like it, is there a story behind it?
good
no. no no no. you can not just end it there! the ending was so short! maybe write another version of the story that is not just a text but more of a narrative? but dont leave it like this!