United States • 19 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
i like that you shared what is going on in your life and i guess it think that it is one of those situations that you have to be really patient and just be there for her as much as you can to prove that you aren't going anywhere and that she can trust you. as far as text, you have a lot of grammatical errors and it was kind of hard to understand but i hope everything turns out fine for you
you lost me a little and the story was a little tense, try to be more unique, still, it was cool.
oh i was waiting for it to continue! don't stop in the middle!
is this for someone or just imagination?
Okay a few things, on the very first sentence there should be a comma after right, in the 2nd paragraph, the last part should end with a period. In the last paragraph at the beginning I think you meant while instead of why, and then when the dialogue switches to the next person, a new paragraph should start. Okay, now on to the next part, I thought it was really great and cant wait to read part 2. Love the plot so far.
good