United States • 22 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
Very well written. It really gets to the reader and allows for them to feel something. Great job!
Okay, this is a good idea. It's lovely, I like how you wrote from both points of view showing they both wanted to talk again. The only problem was there were a lot of grammatical errors which made the piece a little choppy to read. Overall though it was a cute story. I'd like to see more!
It's a good poem. There are a couple grammatical errors however that make some lines a little difficult to read. Overall it's a good poem.
Hang in there it gets better!
I love the idea of this. The broken man and the girl who puts him back together. There are quite a few grammatical errors but I'm guessing English isn't your first language so it's understandable, if you wanted to check some stories I've found there is a grammatical error checker in the writing forum (I'm not sure what else you would call it). Overall it was a good story it just needs a little clean up. Great job! Please do continue to contribute to this site.
Good story with a good theme, however at times it was a little rushed which made it hard to read in certain parts. Other than that it was really good. I liked the purple wings, it shows a kid's imagination well.
Underneath all of the grammar mistakes and spelling errors there is a good story. Throughout the piece you make many errors such as punctuation, spelling, grammar, repeating, and hard to read descriptions. I don't say this to discourage you, this is a very good idea and I think with enough hard work and time you could reshape this into something amazing, but next time a little more care for errors. Overall it is a very creative idea. Keep writing!
Aw, what a lovely little tale. I really enjoyed this story. There were a couple of errors here and there, but nobody is perfect. Beautifully written, and a job well done.
The story has a common concept, one that nearly matches that of the very popular show most teens watch called Thirteen Reasons Why, which I'm guessing you based it on. There wasn't much of a build up and at times it was sloppy and difficult to read. However I think there is a really great story lying in here. Through practice and hard work this could become a very good piece of writing. Keep up the hard work!