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TheForgotten

TheForgotten is from US United States • 22 y/o • Female

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AuraBlades by resie

Underneath all of the grammar mistakes and spelling errors there is a good story. Throughout the piece you make many errors such as punctuation, spelling, grammar, repeating, and hard to read descriptions. I don't say this to discourage you, this is a very good idea and I think with enough hard work and time you could reshape this into something amazing, but next time a little more care for errors. Overall it is a very creative idea. Keep writing!

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If I Had Known by Erin Milligan

This story is good, however it is almost exactly like one I wrote before this...

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The Poet and the Novelist by Outcast the Wolf

I want to just start off with-I absolutely love, love, love, that poem he had wrote for her. However there are a few little hiccups in the story that cause it to be a tad bit confusing. Overall I liked it though.

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The Beginning of My End by Rebecca Kathleen

I thought the story was okay. There were a few grammatical errors that created a few 'hiccups' for me.

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The Woman in White by Rebecca Kathleen

Overall the story was fine but, I think in this one extremely rare case I slightly agree with Apemann. Other than that it was good.

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The Lights by Sandra

The story is a good idea. However there were many errors, luckily they're very easy to fix. I noticed that your dialogue was a little mixed up, every time someone else talks you start a new line. Like this...
"How's you're day Julia?" Tom asked
"Very well thank you for asking" Responded Julia
Other than that the story was pretty good. I hope to see more from you.

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Summer Love by KilalaKitty

The plot line of this story was fantastic. However there were many missing pieces and it made certain parts choppy and seemed to be skipped over. Besides that I really enjoyed this story!

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An Angel's Note by Hokay21

The story has a common concept, one that nearly matches that of the very popular show most teens watch called Thirteen Reasons Why, which I'm guessing you based it on. There wasn't much of a build up and at times it was sloppy and difficult to read. However I think there is a really great story lying in here. Through practice and hard work this could become a very good piece of writing. Keep up the hard work!

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