TheForgotten

I liked it, it was interesting. The flow was a little bumpy here and there, but overall it was good.

This poem was very honest. The ending could be finished, it depends on how you look at it, either as an open ending leaving the reader to finish and fill in the blanks, or an unfinished ending. Very true poem though.

A good poem, but it is very sad. Everything going okay? Please seek help if you are having unhealthy thoughts, it may not seem like it but life is never hopeless.

Very heart felt. I am sorry about the pain you're experiencing. Writing is an extremely good way to express your feelings. Well done.

The story in itself was good. There were parts when commas were missing and some where a period was needed but overall the grammar was good. Word choice was a tad over done, while a large word here and there is good and adds to the story many of them can often times make the sentence a little choppy. Overall a job well done

Whoa. This story is great. I really would like to see where this is going to lead. Great work!

The story itself was good, and cute. I noticed a few errors in the story though, which can be easily fixed. Very cute little story!

I love the idea of this story. It's unique and I believe it had a message. Just a side not but in pativular parts the story would get a little sloppy. Otherwise I really liked this peice.