Optimism101

So0o0o0oOo0oo, I liked it. It's a good work, it could just use some fine tuning. I'm not trying to be rude, I just wanna help. I think that you did a cool thing with the last 2-3 lines. The last two with their rhyme hit pretty hard and worked really well, but it didn't mesh very well with the top portion. I feel like if you make that top part rhyming, or even just close-ish then it could do a lot better. Maybe try doing some flow exercises too. Either way, it's a good piece, and you're well on your way. Safe travels! Stay optimistic!

Nice to see another one out there

Okay, well, it's not that bad per se. I mean it might not be the best piece but it is no where near the worst.
I enjoyed it

*Imagine like a slow clap but a little faster cus I'm not gonna be rude but not fast enough to provoke excitement, but instead at that perfect "That was beautiful"*
I get it so much its crazy
It's amazing and relatable, which is THE feeling you wanna give in a poem.
Good job

Such a nice piece!
It comes together really well in every possibility.
I really like it!
Keep writing!
And don't forget the optmism!

Nice lyrics, king of anything is a goodie. I like it... and don't. I mean, it's always nice to have this sort of song, but hate needs to be forgived :P. You will probs gladly proove me wrong, but it's just what I think.

It's a good one! I like it, but then again, I kinda like everything. Guess that's just kinda how this works :P.

Oh damn