Optimism101

A nice creeps story. Gives chills. I feel it could use another draft though! Just some simple stuff, the basic more description stuff, less I's, etc. But other than that, you have a nice premise, and a nice creeps story. You're so close! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

So0o0o0oOo0oo, I liked it. It's a good work, it could just use some fine tuning. I'm not trying to be rude, I just wanna help. I think that you did a cool thing with the last 2-3 lines. The last two with their rhyme hit pretty hard and worked really well, but it didn't mesh very well with the top portion. I feel like if you make that top part rhyming, or even just close-ish then it could do a lot better. Maybe try doing some flow exercises too. Either way, it's a good piece, and you're well on your way. Safe travels! Stay optimistic!

It's a nice, inspiring poem. Uprising. It's one that would shine out of a rainy day.

As one wise person told me once, on my first post, "Sometimes less is more" Something small can still have a big impact. You also define the story as "Terrible" and sure, there are grammar and spelling mistakes, but that's something editing can fix. Otherwise, for the content, it is something we all have to deal with. It's that problem in all of us we can't solve. I try to push it away with "Every down has its up, and every bad day has its good." But it only works now and then. It's a nice story. Could use some polishing, but your content, your work, its nice.

Woah. That was brutal. My feelings just kinda crumbled in the corner. The turns, the changes, the effects. I don't know how to feel about this, my emotions have blended together into everything. I find myself feeling overjoyed, depressed, surprised, humored, and everything all at once. Maybe that makes me insane. Otherwise, It was a little tough to get through, so I recommend spreading out your paragraphs, and starting a new line for speech. Some grammer mistakes, but otherwise, the story is amazing. You are so close. "You're ripped at every edge but you're a masterpiece" You are so close.

Wars are never good. I feel it could use some rewording, but otherwise, it's good!

"I have all the time in the world" Waiting. A simple, short poem about waiting. And a devastatingly long wait that is. Nice poem

You know, i like it.
I always love interesting concepts and plots, especially with fantasies.
It's amazing what the mind can come up with.
Anyways, I did feel like it was a little bit rushed, maybe you could spend some time earlier defining some of the characteristics of a cloud walker and what they do and such. And I know that not revealing things until later is a very fun thing to do when writing, but sometimes it just leaves others confused.
Overall, it's a very nice story, and it has a lot of potential!
Keep Writing! From one author to another.