United States • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Cheesy? Maybe just a bit, but mostly because that's the way of things, I think. I absolutely love this. You've managed to capture perfectly the way that I've felt many times. This story is beautifully written and conveys so much emotion without being overbearing and wordy. Thanks for sharing it!
I've never been in love either, so I'm probably not the best person to be writing this review. From what I can tell, the main character is suffering from depression, and whoever their crush is is the reason they're still here. I could feel the emotion and I just wanted to say to keep writing, you're really good!
You did a really good job of keeping the action going the entire time. It was interesting to get inside the thief's mind. The cliffhanger at the end left me wanting to read more. Great job :)
This is just.. Like, it's so weird, and when I first read it, I just kinda thought it was weird abstract stuff, and while I still kinda think that, it's also got a story that I didn't notice before. Basically, what I'm trying to say is that it makes me smile, but also furrow my brow in confusion.
It...It...It fits too perfectly. I don't know what else to say.
Beautiful descriptions. Very nice work.
Yes Thomas, this happens to other people. I seldom write out a plan beforehand and I don't always know when inspiration will strike. My stories don't always work out as I thought they might.
Even full time writers can jot down notes, give up on them and come back years later with better ideas of how to develop the idea. Perhaps you'll be able to finish something in the future when you can't see how to now.
As in part one, the descriptions are vivid and you build suspense well.